Learning Journal Four

Step Two:

This week in class, we learn the outline of a Wikipedia and how to research for credible sources using academic search engines to search for evidence that would help support and credit our reasoning on a particular topic. We learn the common mistakes a typical college student takes when assigned on a research draft for a class. We learn the importance of using Wikipedia and Google to narrow down a topic in word terms necessarily used in academic search engines or library databases when searching for credible evidence or scholarly articles. I plan on using these new techniques I learn by simply readdressing how I search for credible relevant evidence on any given assignments in the future. I also plan on gathering knowledge on more academic search engine websites that would allow me to gain further access to many other sources available online simply for the sake of supporting a main idea in an assignment.

Step Three:

  • Take A Swing At This: Golf Is Exercise, Cart Or No Cart:
    • The website that wrote this article is NPR, which is a national public radio broadcasting news all over the world and is known for the least bias in delivering news
    • All of the dialogues are professional golfers who compete in world tournaments
  • The relationships between golf and health: a scoping review:
    • The website is British Journals of Sport Medicine known for doing original research on participates to gain knowledge on a particular event
    • The article has been reviewed by eight doctors in the sport of medicine
  • One-Year Follow-up Study on Golf Injuries in Australian Amateur Golfers:
    • The website of the article is Sage Journals known for the 5th largest journal publishers around the world
    • Credited by three researchers who has a PhD in sport science.
  • The mind/body connection of the golf swing:
    • Reviewed by authors who has a degree in Psychology
    • The website that support this research is Research Gate which is known to have researches written by scientists all over the world
  • Mood Changes Following Golf Among Senior Recreational Players:
    • Reviewed by professors from University of Wolverhampton and Worcester in the United Kingdom
    • The website that support this research is Journal of Sports Science and Medicine known for making scientific electronic journals and case studies
  • A controlled trial of the health benefits of regular walking on a golf course:
    • Reviewed by ten authors who has a doctor degree in medicine and science
    • The website is Science Direct and it is known to inform solution to researchers and health care professionals

Step Four:

  • Take A Swing At This: Golf Is Exercise, Cart Or No Cart:
    • The main idea of this article explains that in the majority of the older folks in the population of the United States, favors the sport of Golf than any other sport in existent. Using the main points described in the article about many different perspectives from golfers all over the nation, gives the audience the sense of familiarity and trust by relating their experience on the golf course to the golfers experience in the article.  The author of the article concluded with golf as the sport that can boost your mentality and relief stress associated by daily life task a golfer might face outside of a golf course
    • The World Golf Foundation estimates that golfers who walk an 18-hole course clock about 5 miles and burn up to 2,000 calories.
    • There’s also a mental boost for lots of players. “There’s rarely a bad day on the golf course,” Gary Metzger says. “You’re breathing good air and looking around at the nice scenery.”
  • The relationships between golf and health: a scoping review:
    • The main idea of the research explains how Golf connects to an individual’s health. In the first half of the research, the author shows to readers many other different cases of studies and ways to access them to help promote the connection between health and the sport of Golf. The study was conducted on golfers from all ages and genders who went out and play a round of golf over a period of time to observe the physical activity in golf and whether golf provides injures to its players. The researchers of this article included various charts and data to conclude that Golf promotes longevity and improving physical health on a golfer.
    • In providing moderate intensity physical activity, it is biologically plausible that golf could be expected to have beneficial effects in the prevention and treatment of chronic diseases, including ischemic heart disease, type 2 diabetes, stroke, and colon and breast cancer.
    • “This scoping review identified over 300 studies investigating the relationship between golf and health. Golf has been shown to provide moderate intensity aerobic physical activity and therefore could be expected to have the same beneficial effects on longevity, physical health, mental health and wellness associated with physical activity.”
  • One-Year Follow-up Study on Golf Injuries in Australian Amateur Golfers:
    • The main idea of the journal is to explain the common injuries that occurs in Golfers during their time out in the golf course. Most of the injuries are caused by the golf swing and is commonly occurred at the impact of the club head of the golf club and the golf ball located on the ground. The study also observed golfer’s habits and routine warm ups that may worsen or may prevent plausible injuries. The research journal was a survey conducted over a period of one year among five hundred and eighty eight Australian golfers recording their injuries associated when playing golf.
    • “The overall 1-year incidence rate of golf injury was 15.8 injuries per 100 golfers, which equates to a range of 0.36 to 0.60 injuries/1000 hours/person.”
    • “Other factors such as age, gender, handicap, practice habits, and warm-up habits were not significantly associated with golf injury.”
  • The mind/body connection of the golf swing:
    • The main idea is to conduct research that supports the argument of whether the game of golf is both a physical and mental sport. The article explains the connections between the mind and the body when the golfer is active during a game of golf through theories and solutions a golfer experience during a give problem on the golf course.  Using this main idea in the Wikipedia entry helps address to the readers that the game of golf is not only a physical sport between the body and the golf club, but also the mind is involved during the course of playing a round of golf.
    • “Golf is rapidly becoming the sport of all ages. Some play it a few times in a season; others play it every day.”
    • “It is a game enjoyed by both amateurs and professionals. Golf is played socially as well as for millions of dollars in prize money. Some play with handicaps; others play with no handicap. All golfers, however, play the game with their physical bodies as well as their minds. Golf has a definite mind/body connection of which every golfer should be aware.”
  • Mood Changes Following Golf Among Senior Recreational Players:
    • The main idea of the article explains the change of mood in the older folks in the community of golf. The article address that golfer preform breathing rhythmic patterns that help regulate a positive mood during a non-competitive game of golf. When golfers were sent to participate in a golf tournament, negative mood develops as spectators observes the golfer developing stress and pressure when making a golf shot on the golf course. The research was conducted over a series of mood scales test by observing golfers over the whole round of a golf match.
    • “It is argued that playing golf for an ageing-population is light to moderately intense exercise, has rhythmic breathing, with some degree of predictable and repetitive movements.”
    • “They found golfers experience a range of discrete and intense emotional responses during competition, arguing the golfers should be taught a range of psychological skills. This finding is consistent with previous research with non-elite golfers”
  • A controlled trial of the health benefits of regular walking on a golf course:
    • The main idea of the article is to conduct an experiment to observe the effects on walking on the golf course and whether walking effects various health in either a positive or a negative way. Using this research observation helps address the reader whether walking is more of a positive or negative effect on health during the game of golf.
    • “Regular walking had many positive effects on the health and fitness of sedentary middle-aged men. Walking during a golf game is characterized by high adherence and low risk of injury and is therefore a good form of health-enhancing physical activity.”
    • “Golf is a social and pleasurable form of activity that includes long bouts of low- to moderate-intensity walking and it can be enjoyed by all age groups and by both sexes. Although the amount of walking during a golf game depends on the golf course and the player’s skills, the estimated distance walked per round is about 7 km”

Step Five:

(a) The Overview:

To observe the connection between the game of golf and its effect with a golfer’s health.

(b) Sections

  • Walking on the golf course
    • Evidence: Take A Swing At This: Golf Is Exercise, Cart Or No Cart
    • Evidence: A controlled trial of the health benefits of regular walking on a golf course
  • Stress and mood associated with golf
    • Evidence: Mood Changes Following Golf Among Senior Recreational Players
  • Common injuries that occur during a game of golf
    • Evidence: One-Year Follow-up Study on Golf Injuries in Australian Amateur Golfers
  • Mind and Body in the game of golf
    • Evidence: The relationships between golf and health: a scoping review
    • Evidence: The mind/body connection of the golf swing

(c) Pictures

Picture for competitive stress

Picture for Injury at Impact

Picture for interaction with people during Golf Game

(d) Citations

Aubrey, Allison. Take a Swing At This: Golf is Exercise, Cart Or No Cart. 15 June 2015. 10 February 2017.

Lane, Andrew M. Mood Changes Following Golf Among Senior Recreational Players. 03 January 2005. 10 February 2017.

McHardy, Andrew. One-Year Follow-up Study on Golf Injuries in Australian Amateur Golfers. 01 August 2007. 10 February 2017.

Murray, Andrew. The relationships between golf and health: a scoping review. 03 October 2016. 10 February 2017.

Parkkari , Jari, et al. A controlled trial of the health benefits of regular walking on a golf course. 01 August 2000. 10 February 2017.

Selicki, F A. The mind/body connection of the golf swing. February 1996. 10 February 2017.

Step Seven:

Some of the problems that I experienced in the past is mostly the context of the evidence. Whenever I read an article and breeze through their evidence once or twice, I usually find that the author has misinterpreted the point of the research evidence they used in their writing. This practice has always lead me to believe that the author is either careless or just doesn’t care about the guidelines of using or citing the research data conducted by a credible research facility. As explained in the essay written by Stedman, I like how relatable the guidelines of driving a car in the road of the United States is so similar to the guidelines on using credible sources on writing. With this in mind, I plan on paying attention to all the nooks and cranny in all my future credible academic sources for every piece of writing I will be assigned in the future courses here at UC Davis. Meaning, to improve my writing practices for the sake of my writing in the future, I have to start as early as possible on a writing assignment to allow the maximum amount of time to thoroughly analyze the credible sources main ideas and allowing those main ideas to flow to the blank pages of paper before the procedure to revise until near perfection.


Living Picture Narrative Reflection

During the writing of the living picture narrative essay, I learn many techniques and writing ideas that would overall improve my writing for the future. I learn that the first step to any writing, whether you are a beginner or an advance writer, starts with brainstorming a purpose of your piece of writing. I found myself occasionally questioning, “Why am I writing this? To entertain others?” I often start by reading the assign prompt of questions which helps develop a direction and a point for the essay.

When an idea or an answer occurs after reading the prompt, I quickly jot down the answer on paper and create a mind map which in the past has really help me create a well structure piece of writing. The best part of the writing process that worked really smoothly is the content of the information I was able to provide to the audience. The difficult part with so much information to give to the audience is the organization of all the ideas which resulted with sloppy structure of the writing. I knew that this essay would be much different than the essay I wrote in the pass simply because the essay is about personal experience. The mind mapping for the writing worked to help develop an idea and answer the prompt but could not accept the past events that I could provide to the living narrative essay. After the peer review a week ago, I noticed that the essay is more of a summary of a life event than a narrative essay. In the future, I should plan on reviewing past events first before mind mapping out the essay to answer the prompt, ensuring that the essay would be more of a narrative side than a summary of a life event.

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Mind Mapping 

Mind Mapping Picture Citation

During the writing process of the narrative essay, I noticed I been using transferable skills that I haven’t realize I been using consciously. The active used skill would be the rhetorical knowledge to a specific audience allowing them to understand the specific words while reading the narrative essay. The passive skill I also have been noticing been used is the meta-cognition, simply by review what I have written and to think critically why I have say those words in that specific way. With the specific alignment of the words in the sentence, I always wonder and question how the audience may have interpret it and ensuring that there is no other way of misinterpreting the sentence in the paragraph as a whole.

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Rhetorical Knowledge Picture Citation

With these transferable skills in mind, I plan to broaden my perspective of different groups of people in society to ensure that I would be able to reach out to them with writing. As a student in University of California Davis, I plan on improving these two skills during further study on a Mechanical Engineering degree that is needed for a life long career.

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College Graduates Picture Citation

Learning Journal Three

Step Two:

During this week, we learned that we should have a mixture between content, clarity, and organization when we write to our particular audience. Without so would be confusing to our readers enabling them to have the wrong message than intended by the writer. With the addition of content, clarity, and organization in our free flow future essay, it would allow us to evolve and separate ourselves from the limited five paragraph essay that was taught during our high school days.

During UWP 001, I am pleased to allow myself to grow in knowledge from my peers to help improve my writing. An example would be last Friday were we discuss the importance of peer review and how my peers would take the role if they were reviewers. Personally, I never give much deep thought on my ways of reviewing other people’s writings throughout my life. I usually just mark what the course instructor would do if I were in his shoes grading my peer’s papers. Now, I see a different way on looking my peer papers simply by telling them what the main points are with my interpretation on his paper to allow him to see if he had made his point.

Step Three:

While reading the Wikipedia article, I learn that we cannot include anything about ourselves, anything that we experienced in our life time, an offensive attack on anything, promoting a business, a title that is not well suited according the WP:SPEEDY policy of Wikipedia, possibility of plagiarism, and self-biased main ideas in the Wikipedia article that we will be writing in UWP 001.

Step Five:

I have chosen to write about Modern Auto Detailing. Basically, the article will explain washing techniques used in detailing a car to its maximum beauty.

  • Washing Techniques (The Two Bucket method)
  • Tools
  • Compounding vs. Waxing
  • Protective Coating
  • Eliminating Scratches

Step Six:

During my reading in the article, I learn that we should include as much credibility to our sources as accurately as possible to allow readers to credit our research writing, to use Wikipedia to get a glimpse of a main idea, to use google to see the bigger picture of the specific topic, and the carefully analyze recent sources during the research process of a writing assignment. I learn that researching is a very slow process to obtain the maximum results for acquiring valuable information needed to begin writing a draft. During my research, I plan to start as soon as it was assigned to allow maximum time to evaluate carefully through the internet to look for key ideas broaden our perspective on a particular topic.

Learning Journal Two

Step Two:

I learned that caption’s on a picture can be a tool that could potentially sway the audience in any direction the author uses to build his argument stronger. After reading my peer’s blog and attending the UWP 001 class, I realize the potential of the pictures and the captions and possibly use this tool to further prove my point to my audience. Though it would be problematic as first to find the right picture to show to the readers because you needed the right image to allow the readers to feel where the author stands on an argument, I guess baby steps of experimental pictures on my blogs in the future would help me get the use of using pictures for my audience to know where I stand or what I feel. What really struck me last week when I was an audience that I realize that using pictures with captions is very similar to modern internet jokes of meme where meme is the focus on capturing a common situation everyone feels at a certain point in their lifetime.

Step Three:

Step Five:

When reading the article about really responding to other student’s writing, I’d never really thought about the different types of writings that such a person could write. Whether it is a personal, argument essay or a report, I learned that the main key for the certain type of writing assignment is to first look at the overall ideas of the writing. During peer review with my colleagues, it never occur to me that anyone who wants my own specific feedback as a classmate or a friend makes me feel sort of special considering I’m at the same learning path as them. The downside I realize while reading the article is not mentioning how well you know your peers before you can really help them in their writing assignment. During the video, I learn that I should take the initiative to first focus on the whole picture on what the writer wants to write about before looking at the specific ideas presented in each paragraph. As of now, I hope that I can build a good relationship with my peers first in order to know their background to help them in their writing on future writing assignments.

Learning Journal One

Step One:

A change of perspective has shown a new meaning on what it means to write. Writing is not something to be finished to show off to others, but as a tool to connect with others allowing them to show empathy to the writer. Throughout my days from elementary school to the last day of high school, writing was a just a burden I needed to perfect in order to begin the first steps of my life goals. Until recently when attending University of California Davis in my freshman year that I realize every published work in the world is not flawless, but filled with error in the means of logical eyes of critical thinking. Every past strategy of writing that was based on what is labeled as “good” was crushed which allowed me to start a fresh meaning on what it means to write. As of now and probably all my future writings in my life will have a perspective of writing to connecting with others than to write to entertain them.

Step Two:

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In my first week of taking the University Writing Program (UWP) at University of California Davis was the evidence I needed in order to confirm that writing is a process to connect with the intended audience. I feel as if every literary work I will partake in the future will have some influence to change who I am as an individual in society. There is no set things you have to do in the writing process, but merely the process to connect to a specific group of people in society. In my future days attending UWP, I expect a learn how to write in order to connect with all types of people throughout the world.

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 Step Three and Four:


The first step I do when I begin on a writing assignment is finding a place to write. I usually write in either the library or in my own room where it is peace and quiet. The second step of action is to finish the first draft on the very same day. The last step is to wait over forty-eight hours to clear my mind before revising the essay to address what I really mean in each paragraphs to the audience I’m portraying too.



I have chosen bubbl.us to create the bubble mapping to show the readers the steps in a simple diagram and bubble.us also saves the diagram automatically in a jpeg file.

The first and second step in the diagram shown above is the most critical writing process if you want to answer in the most accurate response. Without the correct interpretation on what the prompt is telling you, there is no way possible to get the most accurate response to the questions you do not understand. Step three allows the writer to answer the prompt personally in order to clear his mind before reading the passage of the prompt. Step four, five, six, and seven explains the actions needed to fully analyze the given passage and to prep the writer for the writing process. Step eight, nine, ten, and eleven explains the writing process describing the discoveries found when reading the passage. Step twelve describes the revising of the essay to help the writer clear any mistakes and to sharpen his meaning to his audience reading his written essay.

Answering to Question:

I usually find myself writing very bad first draft in all my writing in the past. Luckily, the revision process I do helps make the draft clearer for the audience to interpret my points on the given subject. While reading Lamott’s passage from a book “Bird by Bird”, I stumble the thought of all her evidence were all personal to her life experience which has weaken the message of her overall passage. Although it may not be the life experience everyone might go through their life, she does give out good points that many professional writers do in fact write really bad first drafts in their career. A missing point to Lamott’s main point on writing bad first drafts is failure to address the possibility of some writers in the world who may claim they do not write very bad first drafts in their whole life. In reading the passage, I might have widen my perspective even more by taking the initiative that people in general are not perfect and are more likely to write very bad first drafts when doing a writing assignment in their lifetime.